Amendment to the first three minutes of our film

Original
The 3 main characters are sat around a lantern in a caged area, can be set at early morning or mid afternoon. They are talking about how the world went to pot. Then you can hear sirens and devastation in the background. The characters are discussing the law the government passed. The screen will then transition to another scene, flickering transition, to a new room where a scientist is talking to the camera about the new law that everyone must give a sample of their DNA to the officials who will use it to help prevent crime (this will be filmed in a dark room with only 1 light on the scientist). The camera then fades back to the main characters sat around a lantern. They then talk about rioting and, looting as the people were not happy with the new law that was passed. The scene then cuts to shaky footage of people rioting and a mad upheaval with dust fliying around then the screen fades to black. When it cuts back the camera then cuts to footage (looking through a man’s eyes) as he’s stumbling towards the group in the cage. We then see a hand grabbing one of the cage and they turn around and scream. The camera then does a shot reverse shot of the person whom the hand belongs too and it’s a clone of the same person. With the camera placed on the floor looking up at his clone, the camera is drifting in and out of focus. The camera then re focuses on the rest of the characters (shot reverse shot) looking at how frightened they are. Then all of a sudden the screen fades to black.

The new first three minutes
To introduce the film, the camera will focus on the characters' feet and the floor. Non-diegetic music will be plaing behind this to create suspense. The characters are then shown to enter a caged area and then they are shown to lock themswlves in, creating tension, whilst the non-diegetic music continues. The last character to enter the room , Boris, walkes past the camera and whilst he does so the screen goes black, like a wipe. The text will appear telling the audience what the film is called and who stars in the film. The characters will be sat down on the floor looking hopeless and then  Boris declares that "it's been a week now" and then Boris and Jim have a dissagrement and the arguement gets more physical. Nicola has to seperate them and then Nicola agree with Boris and says that it was the government to ruin the human race in England. A transition appears of a news report which Nicola talks about which shows that the governemnt declared mandetory DNA samples. Then the scene changes back to Nicola, Boris and John and snipets of someone outside of the cage appears and Boris goes out to check. Boris gets attacked and Nicola and Jim go and look to see what was outside of the cage, attacking Boris. The clip ends with Boris saying 'shit'.